given your reluctance to read i doubt any is in your eyes.
LOL people are bashing this guy’s writing when he hasn’t even asked to be criticized…
Absolute insanity, the guy’s OC isn’t even bad compared to what I’ve seen on Undertale fandoms as a kid back then.
It’s leaning towards more of a overpowered protagonist power fantasy type stuff. And the story about him being devoted to destroy tyranny and what not is a decent start. (or a goal to change the world?) Nothing wrong there.
Who said everyone had to abide by the rules of the entire plot of AO??? Even my OC’s AO verse isn’t entirely 1-to-1 to Vetex’s because it’s fanfiction lol.
I will say however you might wanna use Grammarly like unlucky said.
Check out this guy’s channel and you’ll begin finding many eerily similar coincidences
public forum blah blah blah reserve the right to comment, parody, and criticize blah blah blah you problem skill issue lmao
post your own creations online and expect criticism
my criticism was aimed towards trying to point out issues with some of the concepts shown here
also yall are aware i posted a a summary of it i actually tried on in a diff post so you may want to read that.
what happened :(( I didn’t bother to read it because if stuff aren’t paragraphed it genuinely hurts my eyes
(I have a lot of trouble reading stuff on screen lol)
I tried to simply give a short overview of Arron’s lore and their freaking out cuz i didn’t bother to add grammar. and im sitting here like its a freaking summary this isn’t anywhere near the real thing.
This is one of the methods, the other being exposing it to an electromagnetic field (please take this with a grain of salt I haven’t read chemistry in a while) to hahafunny lmao the electrons.
I’m pretty sure said gas HAS to be neutral too
You have to make your summary intriguing, like the blurbs on the back of the books for people to actually feel the need to reed it!! And the lore has to be interesting enough for people to get hooked.
we’re annoyed at the part where literally this entire oc backstory is the stereotypical edgy OC (do not steal) backstory, and me personally annoyed at the fact that the entire plot of anything you try to write with this character, as a character that exists within said plot, cannot make any sense simply because they are just too powerful to have any issue they can’t snap their fingers at and solve
brother i have told you Its not impossible i have written 29 chapters with this character existing you are exaggerating a lot.
by that logic jjk cannot have real conflict because gojo exists. and yet it does have a heck of a lot of it strong characters do not invalidate conflict as long as they are not the main focus.
The fact of the matter is I wrote this several years ago and while it may be a little edgey it’s not as bad as you’re makingbit out to be and its not like I can change it now anyways.
I think you’ll find if you just actually read the story he is not that stereotypical. We come back to this as things are revealed and the story becomes much more developed.
If you don’t want to read it then don’t.
the thing is, it doesnt
in greek myth ares would constantly go get hurt and go crying like a baby to zeus who would give him some sort of godly painkilling ointment
if anything he would just be lying there painfully to heal
just because zeus is unwilling to heal people by giving them a portion of his power does not mean it cannot heal
I’ll admit that the way this was written kinda reminds me of my older OCs from when I started doing art for fun
There’s nothing wrong with making OP characters at all
Though this crazy ass lore with the fantastically awful grammar is admittedly pretty funny in a pseudo-cringe/pseudo-heartwarming way, it’s just someone having fun and going absolutely nuts with their creativity, which, more power to them.
It’s not perfect by any means, but there’s still definitely something to appreciate here
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what does it matter if it’s a bit edgy though, there’s no harm
again please read its a summary this isn’t even the actual lore bro!!!
Summary or not this is real and it exists and god damn is it peak
why do I keep thinking of evangelion when I read it though
because evangelion lore is just about the same in terms of how weird and insane it gets in comparison to this
arron…
the baron 