holy cliffhanger and holy visceral emotions, I expected something to happen with Keandra I didn’t know what
because when people react like that they’re suppressing emotions that are going to fucking burst one way or another
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Indeed they are. It’s inevitable that after this long in war, most of the soldiers are approaching their mental breaking point. Unwise decisions are prone to follow.
I’ll be trying to make the next chapter more quickly. Expect further visceral emotions.
CAHPTER 8 IS NOW HERE, WE’RE JUST PAST THE HALFWAY POINT, YA’LL!
Also, a personal thank-you to everyone who’s been reading this. Your interest means the world to me.
alright reading that authors’ note (sorry I forgot to comment on this lol) I could give my feedback but I’ll have to reread it in detail so I’ll do that if I remember once I get back
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I’m gonna hide it incase anyone wants to read it but hasn’t yet,
1: The Beginning
The way Megan dissociates from reality to the memories that made her feel safe and sane is really well done damn
I do feel like when she starts thinking about Joan, someone that relates to the memories of the war aka the very thing that made her crack, the writing should pick up the pace into more incoherent rambling.
Stress. Single words, double words, things that convey nothing and everything at the same time.
I see it a little at the end, and I think it could work as a powerful moment
I’d give an example but I don’t know how, and my embarrassment is getting ahead of me. I’m also not a good writer at all, so don’t take my advice for granted.
holy shit I don’t know whether I should’ve given feedback or not it felt REALLY bad
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Regardless of quality, there is honor in genuinely trying. Besides, your feedback helped me confirm some things—it was by no means bad. Notably your second point, which I’ll take into consideration for the future.
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Chapter 9. Read. Now.
wawawa (shiansi24)
ok this is peak
Chapter 10.
10 characters.
Chapter 11.
I have little else to do right now, so the updates are gonna be coming in fast.
We’ve hit chapter 12. Just one more to go!
that letter is personal to me
reminds me of something a friend of mine wrote to me over these very forums during the war, and thankfully it ended before the place I live got fucked up
or most places for that matter and im glad for that. NO one deserves to go through the 100% true authentic war experience like what is happening right now in more than a few countries.
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War is the result of the corrupt and petty pushing common men and women to hate one another. It’s as true in Grave/Digger as it is in the real world.