A new light: Chapter 1

This is an AU where events follow mostly the same timeline as in game, but several world building aspects are changed and the story follows a group who act as our in game character in terms of impact

This is an Introduction chapter and there are 4 more on the way after this, only the. Does the story properly start feel free to skim past it if you want the general understanding

Enjoy and please provide critique to help me :smiley:

Chapter 1: sparks of war

Talida leaned on the wall, staring at the high ceiling in her grand room, the chandelier looking like a flaming dragon slowly turning round. The room was fairly huge and maintained with all the care and dedication one would expect for a guest room in Ravenna’s castle, surreal in its appearance and cleanliness. Any noble would’ve been in awe of its presence but Talida had more pressing issues circling her mind

She has finished a several month long trip to Ravenna from her homeland in Sameria through the treacherous dark sea, and while the effects of her journey may have vanished, her objective as a representative of her kingdom in this place made her anxious, tensions between Sameria and the kingdom of Keraxe had started to rise, more so than in the past and she had been sent to request military might from Ravenna

Not that she had agreed, she was a mage, a very experienced and powerful one no less who could bring raw power to the battlefield and match an army by herself, but the enemy too had powerful magic users and curse users in high numbers. Still she felt it more necessary to search for other powerful mages or magic users and had her eye on a few people in this sea, but making a move would be unwise as of now

A knock sounded on the door and she opened it to find Hopps, an assistant assigned to her by the empress, while not having awakened his magic, he still possessed large amounts of magic energy and was an expert with weapons of all kinds and excelled in his job.

“The king has asked for us, ma’am”. She nodded and proceeded down the corridor. Talida wished she could have used sensing to detect more about the layout of the place but she was in the presence of any powerful mages, not even to mention glass curse user-General Julian. Needless to say it would lead to complications. They soon came in front of two large bronze doors which opened to allow them in.

Seated on a large throne, holding a golden trident which emitted an aura sat king Calvus, at a glance she could tell that he was powerful but power alone isn’t enough to rule. She had heard nothing praises for the king who ascended the throne at
Young age, stabilised his kingdom and brokered a treaty between Sameria and Keraxe. “He looks tired”, she thought out aloud and true enough the king looked weary and wore an expression of grim solemnity

“I have heard your request and while I understand your fears, Ravenna cannot afford to send any of its troops, we have a situation of our own currently.” Talida wore a disappointed look while feeling an odd sense of victory, but she knew she had to press the topic for her objective
“Your highness, the tensions have risen by quite a bit since the last visit, we need additional forces to be able to ward off potential attacks not just from keraxe, but the pirates around the borders who’ve started to become more bold in their actions”.

The King sighed and said-“I’m sorry but we have a situation of our own, the news has just arrived this morning that fort talos has been devastated by some powerful criminals, our general, Argos has been killed in the attack, I’d sent Julian on the way to escort these criminals form the navy stronghold after completing a task. As you can see this is a matter of utmost importance.”

Talida was stunned by this news, a group capable of destroying the fort? This was something she had to see no matter what. Realising that further negotiation was not an option she bowed and was escorted out along with Hopps.
In her excitement however, she failed to notice two robed men slip through to the throne room

“Hopps, arrange for a sailboat to the grand navy stronghold, this doesn’t look like an ordinary group and I think we can convince the authorities to allow us in”.
“As you say ma’am, I’ll ask for it from the main harbour”.

Feeling elated at having something exciting to do Talida walked to the castle entrance and breathed in her first breath of freedom in a long time
A few steps down the stairs she froze, sensing a massive amount of energy nearby, and then an explosion sounded across the kingdom.

Using her magic, she shot up high into the air in a lightning powered leap faster than a man could blink to see the castle, or rather what was left of it, smouldering and brought down to the earth, with no sign of the king she scoured the ruins to no avail, then she sensed more energy sources suddenly expanding all across the kingdoms capital

The sight was horrific . the air grew thick with fumes and the scent of blood and burnt flesh began to reach her nose, thick orange flames danced around consuming everything in sight , panicking she created two javelins of ice, forming instantly from magic circles and shot it at the revolting flames, the ice exploded and covered the area completely, smothering the flames
Down below Hopps helped a family escape a falling building by destroying the structure completely, ravennan soldiers issued orders which were drowned out by the shouts of the populace

In that instant she knew that such a scene was but a glimpse of the future, news of the kings death would destroy the flimsy treat between the two kingdoms and accelerate a war so Terrible, that Sameria would be able to mount a mealy resistance before being slaughtered, there was not time to wait for an organised militant unit to get ready for long arduous journey through the dark sea, she needed something, anything that could help them in the slightest as fast as possible. Then she decided that it was time to enact a plan that had been brewing in the back of her mind and made haste to the harbour calling for Hopps to join her.

She leapt onto the nearest sailboat and unfurled it, with Hopps following suit and taking the wheel. They then set a course to whitesummit.

Thanks for reading and please provide useful critique

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Many sentences feel either too short or long, and you could use -'s and ;'s to improve general fluidity.

It also usually never hurts to toss in more detail, make sure to breathe in as much life as possible :]

Keep up the great work!