The Fire Mage Chapter 1

Hey guys welcome to the first chapter of my new book. Just wanted to see your honest opinions.
Copy 2 of The Fire Mage - Google Docs

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Tense is kinda awkward, might want to throw in more dialogue in the future, but nice! Good plot and splendid pacing!

Thanks for the tip, I will keep in mind for the future

gg better than me