The Waltz Between The Frozen Guardian & The War Valcano: Prologue

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When the darkest of nights cover the world, the brightest Light Casas it away…or…that is what is what young Issac Thought as he fished out a clownfish from the vast water that surrounded his home island Palo Town the young mage, whom was despite the Frost and Ice magic he possessed, was as bright as the Sun it self, and had a pure heart of Gold, " A bright, pure light in the world of Darkness" many would claim. But what would be of Light without it’s antithesis consort Shadow? What would the world do if the Light flickers out and dies? What the Lights remaining kin do if the lights die out? Are the very thoughts that plagued the mind of issac as his eyes, his cold, dead, empty, eyes, that were once filled with a vest brightness peered into the reflection in the water that stared back at him.

“The Guardian Of Palo Town. Is what I am supposed to be, to protect, to assist, to cure. Yet here I am, wasting myself…I need to get back up and continue fighting but…i feel empty, more empty than I ever have…”

The Negative thoughts surged through his head, like a Maelstrom in a hurricane, his heart beating slowly, and as his silent cries, his silent scream, his sorrow and agony, being heard to none, but himself…and it is all because of HER the woman whom claimed that her heart was sworn to noone but his. The woman whom sworn to remain by his side until the end of her days, the woman whom sworn to never, ever, betray his love and trust, and yet she did…The day was, and is something that will haunt Isaac Vermont for the rest of his days. The day was June 16th 1864…

Notes

This is short i know, but this is, as the title says, the Prologue of TWBTFG&TWV, this was originally plan for you all to read on google docs, but i don’t know how to make a link, and untill I’m 1000% sure i know what I’m doing, I’ll post the rest the chapters here. And when i figure it out, I’ll post the Prologue, and the other chapters on google docs for you all to read.
Also i estimated there to be nine chapters of this story, and do NOT expect them to be out suddenly, i’m still working on lore and other stuff soooooo. Yeah

Also it should be obvious that this is NOT in anyway cannon to Arcane Odyssey, this is something i had thought of.
A very small few of the fourm have seen a previous story i made called “The Sun Tangled In Lies” which was a Dumpster Fire is now canceled in favor of this

Also TWBTFG&TWV will be reworked at a very VERY later date
And as for this. I am open to hearing any constructive criticism to improve. With that out of the way, Peace! :v:

To Be Contued…

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He’s emo

Also to make a link click the share button at top right of Google docs, the change link perms to everyone with the link can view, then click “Copy link”

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I can’t like anymore so here: :+1:

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Some feedback:

  • the title is kinda cumbersome and not very catchy. I think that changing the word ‘lava’ might help with that, as it is a repetitive word that ends in a non-uh-sound vowel in a title which has only words that end in consonants or uh sounds.
  • using elipsis too much can result in them not carrying as much emphasis.
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Man I could never guess what the title is inspired by, this is a brain steamer

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Ok thanks bro, also thanks for feedback, I’m not very good at storytelling so this was a bit hard to do, but I’m proud of how it came out, I’ll work on everything you said, thanks for the feedback!

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Sorry, but i can’t tell if your joking or not, is there actual something with a similar title? If so what’s it called?

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Well there’s “A Song of Ice & Fire” aka Game of Thrones which is what I was referring to, but there’s also a rhythm game called “A Dance of Fire and Ice” which is so wildly close to the title with just different synonyms

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Oh, I’ve heard of that last one, but never looked into it. Also the title “The Waltz Between Frost & Lava” was admittedly rushed, it was originally supposed to be called “Cursed By Hoarfrost” it was supposed to be a story viewed in Isaac’s ex perspective, but because of how the story was going i changed it. And changed it again a few minutes ago

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No problem! Best advice I could give you, however, is just to read more and write more.

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